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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and / g/ [: c* A, c0 o5 ^
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) Y8 v) e! U# U) M! ]' n5 j
! [% I$ M$ V; ~2 r! j5 I ?! z3 p! sLet me just rewrite yours:* n' ?; q+ c% o2 z) R
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- p: K: I6 D8 D" w' f
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing! ^ g1 @/ H; @* d! i6 B2 `
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.3 P3 s/ z2 X7 a, O. d9 _ z
# G, }4 j+ W# p/ b/ `& sThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# j/ ~, c. m2 W+ u' ?
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 m' g5 Y* \% W1 u- N W. }2 q
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