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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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/ p1 o! C3 F# [: L, K ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! @1 i$ U, Q* A! Feveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) H; L& L' d: H2 k* w8 Q6 Z$ A. o: \% e
Let me just rewrite yours:5 H/ {+ Z4 }" `* A# v _
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me% Z/ R$ z. V& o! R& K, a7 J
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 |) I8 { X @: y$ ]& z2 W- U
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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1 ]$ g8 h- n/ S1 s" A2 bThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ [6 [# Z3 E7 q2 h8 z
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ m( H9 T9 m, V8 a' }! ]
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