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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:' @1 J# |9 z- i, b5 ]4 K- Y8 _5 l
& c9 p+ X+ F: P8 Z* kit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 _3 N2 x% U* n3 K+ {' Severyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; p" A+ S( d O" J9 _* V9 q
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Let me just rewrite yours:. W& m. y, w, a$ _ P; \6 @5 ^1 i
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% {. K0 l7 ^2 ^* W# b. r- d& U2 O2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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2 F p+ {( A( T% o% N! {( x U% R1 bThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.7 i0 B/ a; I0 [8 ?
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