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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 ~3 z' }: w+ l( V! i
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
7 G ~" \3 U/ \3 @, W9 u: ?& ieveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! G' W% F& X9 w4 i/ h! l3 @$ W# o, C. y
Let me just rewrite yours:- @$ t) h; o' C+ r
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" J4 _: t b3 k
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 C! C4 L/ N4 ~2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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% s* x) ~5 @1 u6 _There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.! S( D8 D+ u5 o4 V# V
0 Y! N5 i- {/ {Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. _6 R# U3 l/ Z9 H
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