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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ l9 @& I; N5 C! j6 \1 B
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 g! E- C& P4 o3 m h$ S% \everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * Y7 {3 \) z# `# m* E
2 r, ]" z7 n( [0 G: l: ]) |Let me just rewrite yours:
% [! E, E0 w2 M; s ]! }3 JIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% ^5 ?8 ^4 J6 P: ?2 f2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" b0 D, g8 ]1 xThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% }% b! |' q" Z+ P4 x; p- A# v. k
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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