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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 W% }) x( e! G
& V( H2 B5 ]9 s, {it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 0 M7 X+ B/ p, u$ @
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; U) v9 w5 B; T! M% `# K% ~/ F) i* N
7 b5 t5 z l4 Y' c }Let me just rewrite yours:, [8 l# U, k4 z' s% k
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me1 @7 k# b2 t2 u+ i% F6 u5 C
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ ~ n( j* T0 M- N: r/ ~# q& o2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 D, ?4 D7 L- J' k4 I0 z8 v: B
1 T+ k+ O7 H/ D/ }1 R' wThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.: Z+ T) o c/ k2 Z e6 r9 m5 H" Y0 ?! h* R
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