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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 5 |: z% f1 f7 H; ]0 J
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 a9 j5 i0 j! R' d0 n) `" W [7 z1 L. {, j+ T
Let me just rewrite yours:
" `5 A1 X+ C# ^6 m1 n6 _9 J7 i- FIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me. N9 l1 @; h) Z. d0 G; ?- d" H( ?) G
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
0 C% E8 G2 u l+ Y8 f2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.. \+ N$ g* D) |: h$ f3 O9 `; M2 v) d
3 o0 |& V2 @' x k( ?There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 j1 X' p( z: S( A u
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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